New Me It was always, and still is, entertaining to listen to the botched attempts of my teachers to pronounce my last name. Lost in a fusion of languages, I entered the English Language Learners Program where I felt the pressure of always being a step behind those around me.
Outside of class each day was UPenn Supplement - Autobiography Robotics It moved timidly at first, its gears slowly churning as it felt the spark of life flow through its wires. Slowly, it turned, rotating on its treads, as it scanned the arena for any signs of movement. Its light sensors on the alert, it sensed that something was near. It nudged forward as it felt its Day One "Take my advice, I've been here for a while. What did you do? Clarinets, Calluses, and Chemisty For as exclusive as it was, Copley's soloist room was rather simple, furnished with only a piano and a bench.
It was narrow too: the architect must not have considered the consequences of claustrophobia before a solo performance. In any case, I took a seat on the bench and started to set up my clari Why Carnegie Mellon? Perseverant, intelligent, and a problem solver. I would use these three words to describe myself and to say why I believe Carnegie Mellon University is the school where I would find the most success. Carnegie Mellon has a rigorous academic environment and will allow me to reap the rewards of an educ Prompt 4: Solving a problem.
This essay is designed to get at the heart of how you think and what makes you tick. Present a situation or quandary and show steps toward the solution. Admissions officers want insight into your thought process and the issues you grapple with, so explain how you became aware of the dilemma and how you tackled solving it. Prompt 5: Personal growth. Describe the event or accomplishment that shaped you but take care to also show what you learned or how you changed.
Colleges are looking for a sense of maturity and introspection—pinpoint the transformation and demonstrate your personal growth. Prompt 6: What captivates you? This prompt is an invitation to write about something you care about. So avoid the pitfall of writing about what you think will impress the admission office versus what truly matters to you. Colleges are looking for curious students, who are thoughtful about the world around them. Make sure you explain how you pursue your interest, as well.
Prompt 7: Topic of your choice. You can even write your own question! Whatever topic you land on, the essentials of a standout college essay still stand: 1. Show the admissions committee who you are beyond grades and test scores and 2. Questions to Answer Including all the facts, feelings, and impressions necessary to set you apart in words is a tall order, but you can do it. Below are questions your college essay might address to get the right kind of attention.
Consider these common prompts before you write. Then write to the supplied prompt or choose your own focus. First create an outline and estimate how long each section should be before you start writing. Some schools put no upper limit on size, but if you write more than words, overworked admissions officers become frustrated.
Aim for about to words. How can you foster your passion and love of learning at this school? If you mention specific things about a college, get the facts straight. Share something specific to emphasize what makes you a good fit. Describe how the school would benefit from your presence. What are your long-term goals? Share your plans. Focus on your most likely general field of study.
How is the college the best place for you to meet those goals? Do you intend to go to graduate school? This question assesses planning abilities and awareness of strengths. Describe resources that will help you achieve your goals. Describe how much it matters to have a first-rate undergrad education.
I balance, I weave, I dodge, I frolic, and my bills are all paid. On weekends, to let off steam, I participate in full-contact origami.
Years ago I discovered the meaning of life but forgot to write it down. I have made extraordinary four course meals using only a mouli and a toaster oven.
I breed prize-winning clams. I have won bullfights in San Juan, cliff-diving competitions in Sri Lanka, and spelling bees at the Kremlin. I have played Hamlet, I have performed open-heart surgery, and I have spoken with Elvis.
But I have not yet gone to college. The author was accepted and is now attending NYU. Analysis This satirical essay — or a version of it — was written in by high school student Hugh Gallagher, who entered it in the humor category of the Scholastic Writing Awards and won first prize.
I sleep once a week; when I do sleep, I sleep in a chair. At thirteen, I saw the ancient, megalithic structure of Stonehenge and walked along the Great Wall of China, amazed that the thousand-year-old stones were still in place. Suddenly I started scratching my neck, feeling the hives that had started to form. Hold the bird longer, de-claw the cat?
Do you take initiative? We realize this writer has been carefully constructing this piece all along; we see the underlying structure. Vagary I should have been on a train back home, hours ago. Then, in high school, I developed an enthusiasm for Chinese.
Studying the definitions prompted me to inquire about their origins, and suddenly I wanted to know all about etymology, the history of words. I had turned slightly at the noise and had found the barely breathing bird in front of me. But you are alive. I want to study foreign language and linguistics in college because, in short, it is something that I know I will use and develop for the rest of my life. I sleep once a week; when I do sleep, I sleep in a chair. Does it think deeply?
Why does it captivate you? Recount a time when you faced a challenge, setback, or failure. Dare I say it out loud? On rainy days, Michael, Jen and I would sit on the porch and listen to the rain, talking about our dreams and thoughts.
Consider also showing concern for others. I needed, more than anything, to escape. What did you do? Prompt 6: What captivates you? The sentences are long. Hugging Mrs.
All I knew was that I felt sick, and I was waiting for my mom to give me something to make it better. After I finished the exchange student program, I had the option of returning to Korea but I decided to stay in America.
Be careful with humor. I rummaged through the house, keeping a wary eye on my cat. My desire to major in biology in college has been stimulated by my fascination with the human body, its processes, and the desire to find a way to help people with allergies. My freshman year I took a world history class and my love for history grew exponentially. It has always been, for us, a matter of fact.
Your Name. I translate ethnic slurs for Cuban refugees, I write award-winning operas, I manage time efficiently. Want to know your real chances of admission? I am someone who is so much concerned about my spiritual life and all the rules and pre What sets you apart from other applicants? Consider these common prompts before you write.
However, you have to find the good weird way to write the admissions essay. Get at least one person a teacher or counselor is ideal to proofread i it.
Its light sensors on the alert, it sensed that something was near. Afterward, we would gather in the living room and Danielle would play the piano while the rest of us sang hymns. Ultimately, that fear turned into resentment; I resented my body for making me an outsider. I would babysit Cody every day after school for at least two to three hours. Questions to Answer Including all the facts, feelings, and impressions necessary to set you apart in words is a tall order, but you can do it. In the years that followed, this experience and my regular visits to my allergy specialist inspired me to become an allergy specialist.